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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Nov 5, 2009 11:50 AM
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Hey me... Ramon....
Work Here.
Coming soon.........................
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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Sep 28, 2009 1:47 AM
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I know. I was too. Half kidding.
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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Sep 28, 2009 1:43 AM
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> Simple, Jimmy, we're just waiting for more. What are
> the occurrences of the future, or are you already
> writing a prequel, like "Wolverine"?
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> (You're not gonna come up with the excuse that some
> dog ate your homework, are you? Because that would be
> kinda lame).
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> By the way, I personally gave you 5 stars, for the
> attitude.
I was just kidding around.
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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Sep 28, 2009 1:07 AM
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Simple, Jimmy, we're just waiting for more. What are the occurrences of the future, or are you already writing a prequel, like "Wolverine"?
(You're not gonna come up with the excuse that some dog ate your homework, are you? Because that would be kinda lame).
By the way, I personally gave you 5 stars, for the attitude.
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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Sep 28, 2009 12:46 AM
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Just four stars??? After all that work I did writing that scene. I poured out my soul..... my heart.... my copy and paste button. I feel cheapened. Like a two Dollar whore on double coupon Tuesday.
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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Sep 26, 2009 10:29 PM
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John appears at Boarder Field next to the chain link fence. He looks over to the deserted Bull Ring and senses occurrences of times past.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9-_2QpbXMbw
(for you sven)
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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Sep 19, 2009 7:55 PM
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Free offer, Rosetta Stone....
Most entertaining, is there more where this came from?
(Yes, and thanks for the card)
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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Sep 19, 2009 7:38 PM
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It?s a sunny late afternoon in IB/Ren Mar and lots of people are out, milling about on the pier. Doug Wilson wanders over to a bench near the pier?s entrance, where two down and out old men are sitting watching the people go by. He fits himself between the two men, lifts his leg and farts loudly. The men give him dirty looks and he makes a "watch out I'm crazy" face at them, they get up and walk away. Doug stretches out on the bench, takes a half smoked joint out of his pocket, lights it up and takes a big hit.
Doug: (murmuring to himself) I never thought I?d see this day, down to my last halfa doobie. Gotta get it goin'. Gotta get back in my game.
He sits smoking, watching the girls as they walk by. Two young women walking out on the pier catch his eye. He jumps up and runs down onto the pier, but he has lost sight of them. Frantically, he makes his way to the end of the pier, but the women have disappeared. The crowds have dissipated and only one man remains at the end of the pier. He is fishing.
Doug: Hey buddy! Didya see that girl? The mermex? That?s my mermex!
Vietnam Joe: Is it live or is it memorex?
Doug: Mermex! My beautiful mermex, my Mexican mermaid, I followed her down here, you musta seen her, she?s just- Poof! Disappeared.
Vietnam Joe: Lots of beautiful girls around today, none here now. Just me and the fish, and not many a them. Just the flyin' kind and they kinda creep me out. Lately it seems like they?re flyin? more?n they?re swimmin?.
Doug: Shit, shit, asshole, shit. Fuck me, how'd I lose her?
Vietnam Joe puts down his fishing pole and rolls a fatty.
Doug: It's kinda like she?s holdin' all the answers in that tight little piñata of hers and all I gotta do is crack it open. Shit, shit. My Mexican key to a beautiful fuckin' life. El disappearoed.
Vietnam Joe: Sometimes things we want just disappear. Here, have a bit of doobie, take the edge off.
Doug and Vietnam Joe share the joint, looking out over the water.
Vietnam Joe: They never used to fly quite like that.
Doug: That?s some weird shit all right. They look more like swimmin? birds than fish.
They watch as three fish jump out of the water and start flapping their fins, heading higher and higher.
Vietnam Joe: Holy fuck, we got us some exiles from the sea.
They watch until the fish are out of sight.
Suddenly a shadow falls upon them and Maria the mermex is standing there. She is alone. She stands directly in front of Doug, looks into his eyes, and pointing a finger at his chest, she fires off a few lines in rapid Spanish. Then she turns and runs back down the pier so quickly she appears to be flying away.
Doug, stunned, hesitates, starts to follow her, but then stops. She is gone.
Doug: I must be really fucked up, she was gone before I could get my feet movin'. That doesn?t happen to me. I must be losin? my touch.
Murmuring something that sounds like ?frat boy?, Vietnam Joe relights the fatty and hands it to Doug.
Doug (taking a hit): So what?s my mamcita say to me? I couldn?t quite catch that rapido espanol. This is good, this is good. The little tease. She?s gotta run off to get ready, right? She wants to meet me later? WOOOOHA! It?s party time! Fiesta tonight! Do some down dancin? in her sweet cuntina!
Vietnam Joe: No party, tonight, friend. There's some heavy shit goin' down. What she said was that you gotta wake up. She said, and this is verbatim, " the end is near". (under his breath)Why am I not surprised?
Doug: What the fuck? You sure you understood that Spanish? She was talkin? awfully fast. Couldn?t she have been talking about this end? (He smacks his butt).
Vietnam Joe: (Packing up his pole and then starting to walk down the pier): Sorry, buddy. I got some further inquiries to make. Looks like this is bigger than we thought.
Doug, totally confused, looks around, walks back and forth a bit, then pulls out his cell phone.
Doug: Hello? Rosetta Stone? I?m calling about that free offer I heard on the radio. Yeah, yeah, basic Spanish...
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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Sep 17, 2009 7:56 PM
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Finally....
I have been trying for hours to log in.
Me too...couldn't log on all day.
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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Sep 17, 2009 5:37 PM
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Finally....
I have been trying for hours to log in.
LOL. Sven, I knew you were clueless of the characters.
I know others here remember the Andy Griffith Show. It aired from 1960 to 68.
Me being born in 1963. I have watched the black and white reruns my whole life. It is a great show.
My son now watches the reruns on TV Land channel.
When Zippy wrote the Deadwood storyline. I having never watched Deadwood tried to follow his lead.
Then I just sat down and thought how hilarious it would be for John to appear in Mayberry, North Carolina. Barney Fife the bumbling deputy runs into John. So I sat and typed and then fleshed it out.
I remember you saying that about writing a story.
I am so glad you got a kick out of it.
So first I would like to thank zippy for the lead. And a lil special thanks to sven. I would also like to thank John and the academy for this wonderful oppurtunity.
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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Sep 17, 2009 10:59 AM
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I'm confused, Sonra, I've done nothing that's worth any mention, just haphazardly placed commas in all the wrong places, that's all.
Seriously, all the work, all the amazing creativity you show are undeniably yours and deserve high praise.
Besides, I wouldn't even know what the scene is about. I laughed because it's written so well, but those characters are total strangers to me. Are they may be from True Blood? I confess, I couldn't stand this show, only watched its first season.
However I appreciate the artistry you and all others expressed in the scenes, and of course, any appearance of JFC heroes is welcome here, on the board.
It's so easy to abuse, crush, humiliate, annihilate...
How hard and how beautiful is to make - a sandcastle out of dirty sand, a poem out of one's pain and dreams. There is something nearly godlike in this most human act.
We spoke with Save about John's story. She said it has had a lasting influence on all of us. Yes, now and here is a living proof of JFC ideas of a community moved, connected and working together.
So, who's next in line?
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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Sep 13, 2009 12:34 AM
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John arrives in Mayberry, North Carolina
Barney: Andy, I found this fellow down by the river.
He says he is John Monad. Then he repeats darn near everything I say. I don't trust him, Andy.
John: I don't trust him Andy. Jesus Christ, Jesus Christ.
Andy: Now, Mr. Monad, what brings you to Mayberry?
John: I am going to be with my father today. My father has more big and huge for me.
In the background Otis, the town drunk, is starting to levitate to the ceiling of the jail cell. Nobody's aware of that. Otis lands back on the floor, stumbles over to his cot and passes out.
Andy: Could we help you find your father?
At that moment Opey enters the courthouse.
Opey: Pa! Pa! Aunt Bee has been hurt. She was cooking a pie and fell into the oven
Andy (stands up): Barney, get in the car
Barney: Ok, Monad you go too, I got my eye on you.
They arrive at the house, Aunt Bee is sitting at the kitchen table.
Andy: Aunt Bee, are you OK?
Aunt Bee: I must have lost my balance and fell in the oven, and then fell unconscious. When I came to, this beautiful bird was on my hand.
Andy: Well, it looks like you got lucky. Not a scratch or burn anywhere.
John: The birds name is Zippy. Miracles happen when Zippy is around.
Barney: Here we go with this jumble again. And of all things a bird brings miracles!
John: Barney is a doubting Thomas. Barney may need to dump out.
Barney: (furious, reaching for the gun in his holster): That's it Andy! This guy needs to leave.
Andy: Hold on , Barn. Mr. Monad is there anywhere I can take you?
John: Barney needs to get back in the game.
Andy: Well, son, I will take you to the county line. Just get in my squad car.
Barney: Get back in the...
When Andy and John come to the county line, Andy tells John it was nice meeting him. As Andy drives slowly off, he looks in the rearveiw mirror. He no longer sees John.
Then he looks down at the seat. There lies a bird feather
A big thank you to Sven... For helping me on this one.
Hope you guys like it.
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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Sep 10, 2009 1:47 AM
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Sookie and Bill are sitting on the beach. A steady breeze is blowing through the high grass. The moon hovers just above the water casting a long, jagged reflection.
Sookie: It?s just that I always want to be with you, as we are now. I?m ready for it, I embrace it. I can?t imagine things being any other way. You will take me Bill Compton! It just has to be.
Bill turns away, ashamed. He stares out at the ocean.
Bill: Sookie, I can?t do this. I can?t unleash this curse upon your soul. It is not something that I ever wanted. It was forced on me, and nothing good can ever come from it. It is a curse, Sookie.
Sookie: I know a thing or two about curses! I am cursed by these voices in my head. You and I are one in the same. Please take me now! I am ready!
Bill looks long into Sookie?s eyes. His own eyes turn red as a carnivorous sneer spreads across his waxen face. He gently grasps Sookie by the hair exposing her perfect neck. His fangs engage and as he is about to plunge in, he spots a silhouette standing on the tip of a nearby jetty, staring at the two of them. He drops Sookie into the sand and takes off at lightning speed to the dark figure on the rocks.
Bill: Can I help you suh?
Stranger: Only my father can help me now, suh.
Bill: Do you mock me? Have I wronged you in some way?
Stranger: There is no right or wrong, only my father, suh.
Bill: Do you know what I am? What I could do to you at this very minute?
Stranger: Bill Compton needs to get back in the game.
Bill: What?
Stranger: Bill Compton and Sookie Stackhouse need to get back in the game.
Bill: What are you?
In the blink of an eye, the silhouette has vanished. Bill is mystified. Back on the shore, Sookie has been gathering herself. She looks out at the jetty.
Sookie: BILL COMPTONNNNNN........
She senses a presence behind her and whirls around to confront the stranger. In a flash, Bill is back by Sookie?s side, standing as a shield between her and the silhouette.
Bill: Easy now Sook, I?m not quite sure what it is we are dealing with here.
Stranger: What it is we are dealing with here.
Bill: Stop that!
Stranger: Stop that!
Bill lashes out in frustration but the stranger ducks his blow and ends up behind them. Bill spins around to counter but the stranger is gone.
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Re: Write Your Own Scenes, Next Installment
Sep 8, 2009 2:47 PM
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I have never watched Deadwood!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Soooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!
Read it and weep...!
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